The table below gives information about changes in modes of travel in England between 1985 and 2000.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

考生5.5分小作文：

The table below compare (compares 第三人称单数要加s) changes of traveling modes in England during 15 years.

首段有语法错误，需要将：compare修改为：compares第三人称单数要加s. 另外要交代好：时间，地点，描述对象等核心元素。

From the table, the numbers of modes increased significantly, totaling about 6475 miles in 2000.（miles单位要写出来）

To be specific, the modes of walking, bicycle and local bus have witnessed some decrease to a different agree（注意时态问题，直接修改为： had experienced a certain degree of decrease）, declining from 255,51,429 in 1985 to 237,41,274 in 2000 respectively.(miles单位要写出来). 另外要注意后面的对比，这样才能整体体现summarize 和comparisons 这样的最终效果出来。

这一段首先是时态的错误，另外是没有进行充分的对比和总结，效果很难出来的。

Other modes such as car and trains have been increased to a various degree, with 3199, 289 (miles) in 1985 to 4086,366 (miles) respectively. Among those increasingly popular travel modes, the number of long distance bus has rise (had risen to) to 124 in 2000, almost 3 times more than that of in 1985. Beside, taxi also follow this trend, with the number of it climb up to 42 in 2000.(这句话是严重的语法错误，因为with 是介词，后面不能接完整的句子，应该接名词或者动名词，with numbers climbing up to 42 miles in the year 2000)  Apart from the above travel methods, the rest of traveling modes change (changed) from 485 to 580, which only see (saw) a minor increase.

In conclusion, the development of society give rise ( gave rise to) to various travel methods and people are able to travel in a longer distance with bus and taxi. 

整体的总分结构，以及先总后分，先一般后特殊的思路是完全正确，但是需要分段。另外主要是时态，用词，语法的问题。另外需要把summarize and compare 进行充分的对比之后才可以。