【0407雅思写作段落训练】Some people claim that not enough of the waste from homes is recycled. They say that the only way to increase recycling is for governments to make it a legal requirement. To what extent do you think laws are needed to make people recycle more of their waste?  

On the other hand, not any people who don’t recycle the waste have seldom thought of this （这句话表达什么意思？）. Some of them may forget or don’t have time to complete it （it指代什么？）. For example, a lat （lot）of people are so busy in (be busy with sth.) their work like doctors, entrepreneurs or others （建议放在people后面补充说明是哪些人群）and they may try their best to recycle waste from homes when they have time. However, when in workday, they are filled with （充满…放这里不合适 ）their career so they are ought to （应该：ought to 或者be supposed to） update their items frequently and hardly spare time to recycle waste from homes （and连接的前后两句是并列关系么？不应该是没时间做…因此应该做…）. If government makes recycling legal, their (政府？) lives may be more uncomfortable and their enterprise may be influenced. Please have a try, （建议直接举例， for instance）if these people put some of their hours of service on other things, some of us who need their supports will be impacted （impact是名词，这里的impacted作为形容词不是“影响”的意思 ）. 内容展开挺充分，但是语言表达平淡无奇，有些句子本可以用剪短精炼的句子表达出来，你写得太复杂，并非句子越长越好；代词不能随便使用，必须要让考官第一眼就能知道这个代词指代什么，而不是要靠联系上下文甚至是猜来弄清楚该代词究竟指代哪个名词。