【0403雅思写作段落训练】Extreme sports such as sky diving and skiing are very dangerous and should be banned. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this view? 我们要求写第二段“极限运动并没有那么危险”，按照 “中心句+解释句+举例子+总结”的方式，100字左右 。

学生版本：

Extreme Sports are not always as dangerous as one might imagine and the aim is to challenge our normal life and also to experiance （拼写错误，experience）different parts of the world （世界各地？experience应该和life搭配）. However, this doesn't mean we should neglect the safeness and expose ourself （ourselves）to uneccessary (拼写错误，unnecessary) risk （本段要求写极限运动并没有那么危险，此处用however 不就变成强调我们不应该忽视危险么？这个论述不应该放在此段，更适合放在第三段阐述“加强极限运动的保护措施”）. Skydiving for example, one of the so-called Extreme Sports （不需要大写）, is safe enough because the participants are asked to be trained while （放这里不合适，训练与教练帮助属于并列关系，用and即可）the couch would help you when you are skydiving in the sky. Actually, carelessness could lead to danger, especially doing extreme Sports.（本段要求写的是“极限运动并没有那么危险”，那总结句应该阐明“不危险”的最主要原因，而不是突然又添加一句“粗心会导致危险”）

 修改版本：

In my opinion, so-called extreme sports are not as dangerous as many people think. All sports involve some element of risk, and there should always be clear regulations and safety procedures to reduce the possibility of accidents. People who take part in extreme sports are usually required to undergo appropriate training so that the dangers are minimised. For example, anyone who wants to try skydiving will need to sign up for lessons with a registered club, and beginners are not allowed to dive solo; they must be accompanied by an experienced professional. Finally, the protective equipment and technology used in sports from motor racing to mountain climbing is constantly improving safety.